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WIP Wednesday 07/30

7/30/2014

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Hi all! I am so excited to join you for WIP Wednesday this week! A special thanks to Melody Park for organizing it!! This excerpt is from a WIP I am enjoying very much! I hope you enjoy this excerpt of a still-to-be-named WIP. :) Happy Wednesday!


He didn’t bother to knock--not that I would ever bar the door to him--before bursting into the room. I had a rare moment all to myself and was so startled by his entrance that I stabbed myself with the needle I’d been holding. 
 
I muttered a small cry of distress, not that Gaston seemed to notice. He stormed in, slamming the door behind him with such force that the walls shook. “Bonjour, Gaston. What--”

“She refused me!” he shouted, kicking a chair that was in his path. 

I furrowed my brow at his apparent rage. “Who refused you?”

“Belle!” he roared, as though I was an imbecile for not knowing already. “I told her of my intention to make her my wife and she slammed the door in my face!” 

My heart began to pound hard under my breastbone. A rushing filled my ears until I thought I would faint. Did he say...his wife? 
 
“Half the town was privy to my humiliation! Why, I’m surprised you didn’t know it already!” He paced until I worried he might wear a hole in the rug Camille had traded for at market. 

Though he was in the room with me, he was talking at me rather than to me, so I stayed carefully silent. I’d seen Gaston in a rage before, though never quite like this. I was careful to keep quiet, even though my heart felt like it might burst free of the skin and bone that entrapped it. 
             
How could he want to marry her? I just couldn’t understand. She was beautiful, yes; she had flowing chestnut hair and deep, chocolate eyes, but everyone could see she would one day go mad, as her father had. All she ever talked of was nonsense she’d read about in some book, all she ever thought about was the next one she’d read. Couldn’t he see that she would never be a fit wife for him? Perhaps I wouldn’t be any better, though I’d try. I would clean his kills and mend his socks, keep his house clean and bear him as many children as
he could give me. Was he blind to what was right in front of him?

I shook my head to clear the disloyal thought. I truly wasn’t worthy of him if I questioned his judgment. I so longed to be worthy. 
 
“Now that little idiot is going to go running after her father!” He sneered. “There is no helping that man, why does she trouble herself?!” He threw his arms in the air, waving them angrily as he paced. “Doesn’t she understand that I need her?” 
 
Need me, I begged silently. Need me. 

“What I have to do is bring her back here, make her see...but how?” The pacing stopped as he pondered the question. 

I watched as he tapped his forefinger on his chin, his face screwed up in concentration. There was a sick churning in my stomach that made me believe I’d be ill any moment. I fought for control of my composure--I would be horribly embarrassed to lose my breakfast in front of the man I adored--even as wave after wave of crushing despair tried to knock me over. 
 
“Perhaps I could go after her...no, that would never do. If I drag her
back, she’ll only run at the first chance. But if I sent someone in my stead...to
talk some sense into her...” 

When his eyes fell on me, as though he was only just now seeing me for the first time, I felt the bile rise in my throat. No. It was a silent, desperate plea that, if he heard, he didn’t heed. I knew by the stubborn set of his jaw and the determined look in his eyes that his mind was made up.

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13 Comments
Joelle Casteel
7/29/2014 11:35:04 pm

wow, what an intriguing alternate point of view, Dinah! the POV character's emotions are amazing

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Leigh Smith
7/30/2014 12:32:54 am

Very intense terrific writing.

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Dinah
7/30/2014 12:50:41 am

Thanks so much ladies! I appreciate you! <3

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Melody Parks link
7/30/2014 01:46:46 am

Dinah. That was wonderful. Where was she when he burst in on her though. It's clear from the excerpt that she has feelings for Gatson but who is he to her right now?
I want to know more about this.. I love stories where one person has the hots for another but they don't know it ... yet!
It's a real pleasure to have you on Wip It Up this week. I hope you join again next week and share some more about this yet unnamed story of yours. You have me Piqued! ☺

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Christina Mandara link
7/30/2014 04:48:41 am

Ohhh, thwarted in love, what a delicious start! Not only are you in love in with the gentleman in question, but you've got to talk his would-be-wife into marrying him. Unfair! I wonder if he'll come around... 10 bucks says he does! ~grin~

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Jaye Peaches link
7/30/2014 04:49:21 am

Oh, I want to know more. Her hidden emotions all wonderfully show through your writing.

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Dinah
7/30/2014 05:02:59 am

Thank you everyone! I appreciate your support so much!

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shelly douglas link
7/30/2014 07:42:51 am

You painted a clear picture with this one! How many of us have loved someone when they were in love with someone else. Wonderful snippet! :)

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Tara Finnegan
7/30/2014 07:47:19 am

You got my interest big time! The names are very familiar, as a mother to young girls. I'd love to know more about this one :)

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Kathryn R. Blake link
7/30/2014 11:37:26 am

Okay, I know who Gaston and Belle are, but who exactly is our POV character, and what is she to Gaston? Very intriguing, Dinah. Though, of course, we know Gaston won't ever win Belle, primarily because she can't stand him, but why is he ignoring what is right before his face I definitely want to know more.

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Maddie Taylor link
7/30/2014 01:47:24 pm

Oh, he wouldn't, he couldn't, say it ain't so. He can't send her after Belle when she is so in love with him Is he blind! Very stirring excerpt, Dinah. It stirred my anger, I want to kick Gaston in the butt and tell him to wake up and look at what is right in front of him. Men!

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Casey McKay link
7/30/2014 11:22:10 pm

Gaston and Belle? Well you have me intrigued. Your heroine obviously loves Gaston... I already think she can do better ;)

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angel
8/1/2014 01:06:59 am

Oh my this is good I am dying I wanted to say no don't say it. scream whyyyy do you not see what is right in front of you man! why do men always want what they can't have? Excellent sneak peek you defiantly have me on the edge of my seat When can I get the book I must have it

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